Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 3:33 PM EDT

The side nip is a nice touch.

Sugg.

Jess: Honey, That the right thing. YESSS!

Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 3:40 PM EDT

I hate to say this, but should there be a little more romance?  Just to show a really strong connection between these two?  You know, so the losing her is a little more powerful.  And by romance I mean something like them in bed her exposed him over her shoulder maybe caressing and kissing.  Something short, but loving just to get the point accross that there is passion and love.  

This is the kind of talk I don't want my wife to hear... She already knows I'm a perv.

Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 3:49 PM EDT

Issue two starts with them in bed. Actually she's still sleeping 

And he's just watching her.  Then she wakes up and tells him to stop being creepy.  

Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 4:17 PM EDT

But I see you get it. He's crazy about her. The idea of losing her makes him nuts.  On their expedition instead of a no name the first casualty is almost Jess. At the beginning he makes the comment that no one is expendible... Except for his brother in law because he's a Rowsdauer. Jess says "I'm a Rowsdauer " bill says "were. I saved you from that wasteland. Then there was the triplepocalypse" or something.  Franks joke 

Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 6:17 PM EDT

Perhaps a panel of her losing her skirt/pantalones...He can be tearing it off with a single, powerful pull.  And I have a different angle for the center panel in mind...but don't know how explicit you want to be.  The joke at the bottom is about canada...if some didn't pick up on it.

Thursday, 21 June 2012 - 7:28 PM EDT

Different angle? You're just trying to see her boobies! 

Interesting question: if we see the queens boobs and show the readers it's that kind of book, but then don't show Jess's, does that make you want to see Jess's even more? Does it make her seem more desirable because she's denied to you?